-When diving into the final essay I wrote in a rush and it was not my best work. When doing my rough drafts I always tend to leave out spaces where quotes are used to help support my ideas better. I Have had problems with this throughout the years of me being a student in high school not just within the college. When people peer edit my papers I am told to add some quotes to support my ideas. I usually brush over that I should be adding more quotes till someone tells me and then I start realizing how unsupported my arguments are. Within the first essay, I was told to add quotes and it would make the argument stronger. Once I did that I felt I truly did make the argument stronger. I am unable to find which quote I had added in because of me stupidly resolving my comments but I do remember fixing this mistake.
Also within my final essay, I had a rough time trying to summarize the ideas without missing too much or adding too much. When running into this an example would be when I was writing I assume a certain part of the text instead of genuinely explaining it. I stated “Having this support gave Abe an outlet of comfort where he could be unapologetically himself.” when peer editing came you asked a good question which made me look back and reword it. You said, “So his dad helped Abe deal with the bullies and assumptions?” Reading this I went back in and fixed my wording to “Having this support, Abe never had a reason to hide away his passion. It was an outlet of comfort where he could be unapologetically himself.” I felt this helped me truly understand the paragraph above better than what I had had before. It was a better-written summary for the end of this paragraph.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LTPwJ8-o80e7QPrTLcOW3MYsDSdNI_zsrA48h-h3v6Y/edit
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ztvu2wi6UWAJ1rB4NSU9yfx3I63hdJxVNVRDMrUjCgg/edit
